■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.
■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
▶ Topic :Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
▶ Your Answer :Nowadays, as more people are interested in social activities, there is a standing issue on whether keeping old friends is more important than making new friends. It is controversial issue and there are many people who agree with the statement. However, I personally disagree with the statement for several compelling reasons as follows.
First of all, people can broaden their perspectives by making new friends. To be specific, people can meet just same people if they want to keep old friends and don't care new friends. Thus, it can make their narrower perspectives because people can broaden their perspectives by interacting with diverse people. However, people who make efforts to make new friends can broaden their perspectives to a great degree. For instance, in the past, I got a long with my old friends who did racial discrimination. Thus, I personally thought there was a hierarchy among races. However, I have met diverse people in the world and I made a lot of foreign friends. Thus, I communicated with my new friends and changed my mind. Moreover, I can broaden my perspectives to a great degrees.
What is more is that, people can get a better job by making new friends. These days, it is hard to get a job because job market is competitive. Thus, I tried to seek internship program in the past. However, there was no friends who could help me. Therefore, I tried to make new friends through the Face book , and I met new friend John who recommended me highly stable company. Consequently, I could get a opportunity to participate in internship program.
Finally, making new friends is more educational than keeping old friends. To be specific, people can get a lot of information by making new friends. For instance, people can improve their foreign language skills with new friends. Let me take as an example. In my case, my old friends are Korean and they can't speak English. However, my new friend John is from America. Thus, he can speak English fluently. Therefore, he helped me a lot and I could improve my English skills.
All in all, each and every fact demonstrates my resolute standpoint that making new friends is more important than keeping old friends. This is because people can broaden their perspectives, get a better job, and educated by making new friends. Therefore, nothing in my mind casts doubts on my stance on regarding the given statements.
Fair: 17~23
점수: 22
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