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Some people think
some old buildings in a city need a reconstruction, to facilitating facilitate their
lives. However, in my opinion, such old and historic buildings are deserved to
be preserved, rather than to be renewed. This is because the buildings are
quite valuable in some respects, especially in historical and aesthetic ways.
To begin with, old
buildings represent a flow of time there, ; which means they show which events
happened there and which era had passed. For example, my hometown preserved the
first cathedral in my country, a piece of wall with gun shots, and the city
hall that was built in a colonial period. Each illustrates how priests were
persecuted for their religious beliefs then overcame, when and where a war came
up and how it affected people’s lives, and how a colonial ruler treated my
hometown. Plus, even a plain house is a quite fine resource to imagine people’s
lives when it was built. Researches can find why it was built with such a
structure, and which materials people used so that the buildings give a reason
for people’s lifestyle of that time. They are priceless reservoir of the
history of my hometown, as they are fine resources of historical studies and
education even now.
Another reason is
so-called old-fashioned buildings have got aesthetic advantages, in that they
are antique and unique. Compared with this, modern buildings-skyscraping, covered
with huge window glass- look like similar in all the cities around the world.
In this way, the buildings can be tourist attractions. London, Paris, and an
amount of cities in Europe are attracting people all around the world with
their antique and historically important features, trying to by keeping their
buildings.
What I’d like to
say is that destroying and rebuilding old, historic buildings is a huge waste
in the city. They reflect history of the city they are located and have values
in both artistic and financial regards.
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