▶ Your Answer : In this society, a lot of the governments
think about which way is beneficial for their countries country, so they usually claim that think
about whether old building should be changed into new ones to attract many travelers from other countries or not. Some people might believe that the
government should allow old historic buildings to be destroyed and replaced with
modern ones. However, in my opinion, they should
conserve these precious buildings.
To begin with, many children can learn
about their country's history by watching these old and traditional buildings.
The knowledge of history is very important
for them because they can understand how to overcome their problems through overviews of
history. Also, if they watch these sites with their own eyes, their
curiosity in learning history will increase. As a result, they will make an effort to
find information about history about the building, so they will be able to
learn about their history spontaneously. For instance, when my younger sister was an
elementary school student, she did not try to learn history of Korea before
visiting Chosun dynasty's palaces.
However, after watching that sites, she
started to ask for a lot of questions information to her teacher and found knowledge on
the Internet by herself. I was very surprised because I had given up
to teach our history because she was so bullish. (What does it mean?) At the time, I realized that historic buildings
concerning history was the best way to motivate children to know better about their give tutoring on
history.
On top of that, the government can earn a
lot of money via courses of tour near history buildings. Most of the people like to tour historic
sites, so they usually spend a lot of money to visit the buildings. When they visit the cities, they will also visit
many restaurants and hotels accommodate in many guesthouses. Consequently, the government will be able
to develop a lot of cities that have various historic buildings related to history. For example, one of my friends, Bob, always
go on a trip to many countries. When we drank beers together, I asked him
why you visited what made him visited and travel around so many countries. At the time, he told me that he felt very
happy whenever he watched historical sites. Moreover, if he visited a lot of cities for
watching the sites, he usually spent a lot of money not only including fees of
historical building but also prices for restaurants and accommodations. (Unnecessary part) I thought that the tourists like Bob would
be able to develop the economy of the cities that contained many beautiful old
buildings.
To sum up, if the government preserve old
building concerning their history, it will be advantageous. This is because the buildings will
encourage children to learn about their country's history that is very
important for wisdom. Also, a lot of tourists will visit the
country, and the government will be able to develop their economy of the
cities. In conclusion, I firmly believe that
buildings related to history should not be changed into modern buildings.
채점기준표 | Grammar | Contents | Example | Coherence | 점수 | 3 | 3 | 2 | 3 | Score | Fair 16-19 | - 두 번째 경제에 유익한 점을 주장으로 잡았다면 일반적인 traveler 예시가 아닌 경제적인 수익에 관점에서 예시를 서술해주셔야 합니다.
- 두 가지 예시가 전문적이고 강력한 이유라기 보다는 personal 하고 general 한 편입니다.
|
|