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Some parents who believe that , believing that strict
rules will bring a success to their children, are willing to become tiger
parents. (Explain it) In fact, however, forcing strict rules does not guarantee a successful
life of children. Rather, parents should not push their children with stringent
rules when they want their children to succeed. There are two reasons why.
First of all, demanding rules are
likely to deprive children of an opportunity to go through diverse experiences
which are necessary to learn some lessons. (Good points, but what lesson such as?) For instance, one of my best friends that I
met in a boarding school did not know how to say sorry to her friend after a
quarrel. She said her father required her to follow strict rules so that she
could not hang around with friends very well so far. Thus, she failed to learn how to
socialize and reconcile after a small fight due to lack of experience and
interaction.
On top of that, since parents cannot
guide the children forever. Therefore, parents should teach their children to
be independent and set their rules by themselves if they really want their children
to succeed. When guided by strict rules implemented by parents, children will
not be able to develop earn an ability of how to think creatively, and how to organize a plan plan, and be disciplined by
themselves, not being able to do anything when their parents are absent. In
fact, another friend of mine, from the boarding school, earned straight A’s at
her middle school. However, her scores at the boarding school declined so much.
The main reason was that she had never tried planning her own studying schedule.
Without an aid of her mother, she could not know how to plan and study for her own
objective.
Indeed, strict rules can help some children to be
disciplined and further grow to become successful. Some parents allege that
their children are living successful lives thanks to the habits formed at the early
age by stringent rules. In many cases, however, strict rules can trigger
adverse effects in that children can be impeded to learn through experiences and
fail in doing anything without continual help of their parents. Therefore, I
think strict rules are not necessary for children to obtain success but
poisonous.
채점기준표 | Grammar | Contents | Example | Coherence | 점수 | 3 | 3 | 3 | 3 | Score | Fair 18-21 | - 첫 번째 예시에서 "Father's strict rule" 이 어떠한 방식이었으며, 어떻게 social skill에 악영향을 미쳤는지에 대해 언급해주셔야 합니다. - 두 번째 내용은 스스로 생각할, 해야할, 준비할 수 있는 독립적인 능력이 결여될 수 있다는 점을 정확히 나타내주시면 좋을 것 같아요.
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