In any educational institutions, teachers play tremendous role in class. Their prime goals is are to infuse in appropriate knowledge to students, however, they should also relate well with students as they spend most school time with them. 자신의 주장은 어디에 있나요?
First, a teacher in a school is a person with authority has an authority within class. A teacher should be serious but also be friendly towards students so they can easily talk to the teacher regarding any issues. This communication between teachers and students is also a significant part of secondary education. For example, when I transferred to another middle school, I had gone through confronted with many difficulties. I faced numerous challenges concerning peers, school grades and was unable to adapt well in the first two months. Within this period, however, my homeroom teacher and I got together regularly for a counsel. This in fact helped me to understand and be engaged with the new school. I still remember the teacher that had helped me, and appreciate for her caring.
Second, it is likely that students learn better if they feel more connected with the teacher. students learn more effectively when they are connected to teachers. Students would concentrate better to the lectures that are held by their most favored teacher and this may be more important than the teacher's actual ability to give knowledge. My personal example can be used here to elaborate my explanation. When For example when I was in 10th grade, my history teacher changed three times over one year. One of the teacher, as I remember, was extremely enthusiastic and also very friendly towards us providing many free meetings. The other two in contrast were stern and refused to provide proper lessons. I noticed that my school grades sharply rose when I was taught by the teacher that I personally liked.
Finally, a teacher must acquire numerous abilities in order to be defined as a good teacher. It is imperative that they not only strive for giving knoweldge but also make constant efforts to be engaged with the students.
Good: 24~30 점수: 24 finally로 시작하는 부분이 결론인가요? 아니면 어느 부분이 결론인가요. 명확하게 어떤 부분이 결론이다라는 것이 언급되어 있지 않습니다. 따라서 명확하게 결론 부분을 서술하시길 바랍니다. 인트로에서는 부족한 부분이 있는데 바로 자신의 궁국적인 주장이 서술되어있지 않습니다. 인트로에서는 자신이 어떻게 풀어나갈 건지를 서술하기 때문에 자신이 주장이 제일 먼저 나와야합니다. 이 부분을 숙지하면서 에세이를 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다. |