▶ Your Answer :
In the reading passage, there was ample
support for the author’s claim that there are some plausible reasons for why
stranding of whales occurs. However, the professor in the lecture gives several
reasons as a rebuttal to the author’s point.
First, the professor contends that the
theory of wind pattern is not accurate. In the world ocean, there are wide
ranges of position which have various patterns of wind and, of course, whales
live in there. And she set an example that in the US, whales located in east
coast at which wind flow away to west coast. This casts doubt on the reading
passage’s claim that wind patterns mislead whales which lead them to strand.
Next, the professor insists that explain
about whales strand because of illness is not reasonable. Sometime, we could
figure out that healthy whales also wander. In addition, some stranding whales
closed to the shore could swim to the deep ocean on their own. This counters
the reading passage’s assertion that whales strand due to becoming weak and
insufficient ability of swim by disease.
Finally, the professor argues that the
geological features of certain coastlines do not matter. She says that all
whales use the same sonar system, so it is wrong that some strand and others do
not. And it is fact that whales which live in shallow shore are not accounted
for stranding. Wherever they live, the phenomena occur. This refuges that the
reading passage’s suggestion that the geological features like gentle slope
make whales strand because they could not use their sonar system readily. Good: 24~30 점수: 24 리딩에 대한 정보가 너무 부족합니다. 한 문장으로 리딩에대한 정보를 각 이유에서 마무리하는 것은 통합형 에세이의 목적을 변질 시킵니다. 통합형 에세이에서 가장 중요하게 보는 것은 리딩과 리스닝을 얼마나 적절하게 잘 비교햇냐 입니다. 이러한 부분에 있어서 지금 이 에세이는 많이 부족합니다. 비록 리스닝에 대한 정보는 충붛나게 서술 되었지만 리딩에대한 정보가 너무 부족합니다. 따라서 좀 더 좋은 점수를 받기 위해서는 리딩에대한 정보를 더 서술하는 것이 좋을 거 같습니다. 수고많으셨습니다. |