▶ Your Answer :
The
reading passage states that there are three causes of the transient lunar
phenomena. , hHowever, the listening passage refutes this idea by providing
several counterexamples.
To begin with, the writer asserts
that the clouds of lunar gas caused TLP. Gas clouds which were emitted from the
moon are visible from Earth as reddish or white hues. TLPs are often seen in
the vicinity of craters where the gas would be able to escape to the surface. reading내용은 맨 첫 문장만 요약해도 충분합니다. 문제가 요구하는 것은 reading의 주장을 lecture가 어떻게 반박하는지 정리하는 것이므로 lecture에 더 초점을 맞춰서 요약하는 것이 좋습니다. Conversely, the lecture contradicts this idea by stating that it is simply a
coincidence that most TLPs are observed near craters. As really small amount of
gas was released from the surface of the moon, it is not sure that TLPs were
affected by the lunar gas. It is no wonder that TLPs are detected around the
surface because craters are frequently observed.
Furthermore, the author contends that
bright clouds of dust would be the factor. Particles of space hit the Moon’s
surface leading lunar dust to levitate above the land. Dust reflected from the
sunlight and dust seems to glow when people see from Earth. 이 부분도 더 간단하게 줄이거나 생략하는 편이 나을 것 같아요. In contrast, the
speaker belies this claim by stating that there is no evidence that the dust
caused TLP. To see the dusts from Earth, dust cloud should be very tremendous.
Such a big cloud storm cannot happen on the moon.
Last, the passage claims that TLPs were caused by solar radiation. Magnetic storm emits strong bursts of radiation. TLPs often occur during the peak of the solar cycle. 이 부분도 요약에 불필요해 보입니다. On the contrary, the lecturer rebuts
this point by stating that this theory is based on insufficient data.
Researchers compared the data of solar flares and the one of TLPs. They matched
up sometimes, but mostly, they didn’t.
In conclusion, while the text
maintains that these are the three causes of TLPs, the professor challenges
these points by stating a few opposing examples. The reading passage and the lecture discuss on the topic of whether the causes of the phenomena, TLPs are true or not based on three points; the clouds of lunar gas, bright clouds of dust, and solar radiation.통합형 답안은 요약문이므로 결론문단이 불필요합니다. 결론문단이 글 자체를 다시 요약해주는 역할을 하기 때문에 요약문에서는 보통 결론문단이 따로 없습니다.
Comment :
reading내용과 lecture내용 비중을 조정해주시는 게 좋을 것 같아요. 통합형 문제를 살펴보면 lecture가 reading의 내용을 어떤 주장과 근거로 반박/보완하는지 정리하라고 요구하는 경우가 대부분입니다. lecture의 주장에 초점을 두고 내용을 정리해주세요. 현재 주제의 경우 과거에 있었던 현상을 설명하는 것이 아니라면 자연현상의 원인을 설명하는 글이므로 과거형으로 표현할 필요가 없습니다. 정확히 지문 내용을 몰라서 시제는 수정하지 않았는데, 실제 지문을 체크해보시고 현재형으로 수정해야 한다면 시제 표현도 수정해주시는 게 좋을 것 같아요. 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Integrated Writing Rubrics Score 3/5 A response at this level contains some important information from the lecture and conveys some relevant connection to the reading, but it is marked by one or more of the following : - Although the overall response is definitely oriented to the task, it conveys only vague, global, unclear, or somewhat imprecise connection of the points made in the lecture to points made in the reading. - The response may omit one major key point made in the lecture. - Some key points made in the lecture or the reading, or connections between the two, may be incomplete, inaccurate, or imprecise. - Errors of usage and/or grammar may be more frequent or may result in noticeably vague expressions or obscured meanings in conveying ideas and connections.
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