▶ Your Answer : It is debatable whether caring for a pet is the best method for a child to learn sense of responsibility. Some people think caring for a pet is tough for a child and hard to learn responsibility. Although people have different ideas and opinions, I support to the idea that a child can learn responsibility by taking care of their pet. First, a child would learn about responsibilities of tasks and time management. for the following two subsequent reasons.
To begin with, a child with pet has their tasks for caring to care a pet, which makes them learn about responsibility of tasks. It is true that taking care of pet is not easy since a child have has to feed, play with a pet and wash a pet routinely. By doing those tasks for a pet, children can learn responsibility. This is because they can realize how important it is for caring to take care of a pet. I will talk about my younger sister’s experience to illustrate this. My For example, my younger sister was so lazy and she used to delay her tasks such as homework. One day my father bought her a dog. Although she really liked the dog but she skipped feed to dog sometimes feeding dogs because of laziness. Someday the dog lost a weight and become a became sick. My sister cried and realized her fault. After the experience, my young sister did chores for a dog regularly. Also, she could get responsibility of role for the dog. This example shows that caring a pet teach teaches child about their responsibility.
Moreover, caring pet enables a child to chance to learn time-management. As I mentioned earlier, child with pet have to do for a pet. It made child put aside time for doing with a pet. A study was conducted by Tokyo University to determine whether raising pet could affect to child’s behavior. There were two groups monitors monitored. One group consisted of children with pet and the other group did not have pet. After 3 month, the researcher found that former group children tend to organize their tasks well than latter group. It means former group children know how to spend their time productively. In the following interview, one of the former group child said that he had to spend time for caring his dog every day, which made him think about time management. Also, he said he made priority tasks every day to spend his time productively, This proves that having a pet render a chance to learn about time-management.
In a nutshell, taking caring for a pet teach children about responsibilities their task and time-management. In this sense, it is fair to say that caring for a pet is the best way to learn responsibility. Good: 24~30 점수 :25 일단 문법적인 오류들이 있습니다. 이러한 부분을 고치시길 바랍니다. 제가 첨삭한 것을 보시고 확인하시길 바랍니다. 문법적 오류이외에는 크게 문제가 없는 에세이인거 같습니다. 독립형 에세이에 있어서 가장 중요한 부분을 차지하는 것은 에세이가 얼마나 설득력 있게 서술되었나 입니다. 지금 이 에세이 같은 경우에는 각 단락에서 간결하게 본인의 의견을 잘 전달한 거기 때문에 잘 서술된 독립형 에세이인거 같습니다. 수고많으셨습니다.
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