■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic :Cars have made a greater impact on society than airplanes. |
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▶ Your Answer :
An intriguing topic of discussion at hand is whether cars have made greater impact on(in) society than airplanes. It may seem true that cars havegave(given) more influence on(in) society. However, with in-depth analysis, planes seem to have made more. Although people may hold different ideas and opinions, I personally consist(insist) that influences made by planes are greater than those made by cars. This is because planes took transportation to a whole new level and caused wars to be more threatening than ever.
First of all, planes enabled transportation between countries very quick and easy(OR: conveniently). Before its invention, traveling was limited only to areas nearby. The only means by which of distant(of) traveling (from a distance) was done by ships, which took months or even more. Nowadays, it only takes (a) maximum time of 24 hours to reach the opposite side of the world. This innovation (has) advantaged(advantages) in various ways especially in emergent situations. For example, an earthquake with the magnitude of 7.4 stroke in Nepal (a) few years ago, leaving thousands of casualties. Thankfully additional loss was prevented as helps(help) from all around the world reached in hours. Supplies for the shelter, troops for rescue, and foods for the victims were sent to recover the tragedy placed on(in) Nepal. As shown in this case, planes offer a beneficial method of transportation, especially in emergent situations.
Moreover, planes have spurred the wars to become more dangerous. Despite the convenience it provides, as always, there is another side to the coin. As easy as it became for the travelers to move around, distance no longer impeded the conflict between countries. For instance, they developed planes for military purposes, loading bombs and troops. Compared to the time when wars were restricted to soldiers and military base only, the aftermath of war extended to civilians. The most representative
case would be the Japan’s nuclear disaster in 1945 where millions of civilians were
sacrificed by it. Thus, planes heightened tensions between countries due to inconceivable
devastation it may result.
In a nutshell, although whether our world have(has) been better influenced by cars or planes may remain controvertible, it seems reasonable
to side with the effects the aircrafts have made to us because of the reasons
discussed in the area.
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