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Various opinions may exist over the issue that what is the most useful way to improve the environment. As far as I am concerned, I believe that planting trees to create parks is the most helpful to improve the surroundings among three choices. The two ideas below can be valid evidence to support my point.
To start with, the government should plant trees and make green parks first among three selections since it is the most beneficial method to enhance people's life environment and qualities . Indeed, many people nowadays suffer physically and mentally from tight schedules and in highly competitive environments. By jogging and gaining some fresh air in green parks near their homes, they can temporarily forget about problems and invigorate their minds. These aspects cannot be filled by other two options. Rather, if the government persuade people to take public transportation or use eco bags instead of disposable products such as plastic bags, this can be a lot of burden to people since they would feel uncomfortable. From my personal experience, I remembered two years ago. There was the green campaign that limited the using personal cars and disposable products. The government had put tremendous amounts of time and effort on this project, but the result was failed. This is due to the fact that many people felt inconvenient in their daily life without personal cars and disposable stuffs, so they did not obey the rules. (이 예시 보다는 나무를 심는 것에 대한 좋은점에 관한 예시가 더 주제에 맞을 거 같아요)
Second, making green areas is the most practical and effective way to enhance the environment among three options. As long as there is the decision of the government, creating green space simply can be done and this can give long-term effect for better surroundings. However, taking the public transportation such as a bus or using environmental friendly products instead of plastic bags would be impossible without people's voluntary participation. For example, according to a recent study conducted by the Seoul National University of Korea, creating various green spaces is more pragmatic solution to make the environment better than any other options including limiting personal cars and using eco bags. The reason is that it can be implemented regardless of the citizen's spontaneous participation and continue to give positive effect to the environment. This proves that my argument is convincing.
To sum up, I firmly believe that the best and wisest way to create better environment is plating trees and making green parks among three choices. Fair: 17~23 점수: 23 일단 두 바디 다 예시들이나 설명들이 이유를 잘 서포트 하지 않는 거 같습니다. 또한 이유가 주제에 맞는 이유인지도 잘 모르겠고요. 이유나 설명 예시를 들을 때 본인에 주제에 맞는 것을 서술하시는 게 더 좋을 거 같습니다. 이러한 부분들을 꼭 참고해 주시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다.
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