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Some people think that students should study
alone in a quite place.
However, in my opinion, the students can
learn more about the subject by studying with through gathering in a group. This is because the
students in who made a group can debate and share their thoughts each other and they
can learn about what they don’t know through helping by other students.
To begin with, talking with other
students about what they learn is important. (In what aspects?) To be specific, reading and
writing are not only prominent part of studying but also speaking and listening
are important to a lot of students. (Grammar structure is wrong) Learning in a group is a good chance for
the students to listen to other's opinion and share their own thoughts. According to
a study carried out in 2014 at the University of Konkuk, researchers found out
that a high school student group that including debating class got higher test
records that the other group that are not. (Need concluding sentence)
On the top of that, the students can
develop their his ideas through helping by other students in the group. When the student
studys alone, he can not know what he is missing. But if he studys with his friends,
the friends will help his studies with their variety of opinions. For example,
when I was a high school student, my teacher told me that my report had only one
side. (Partial you mean?) I had fragmentary idea about the subject. So I asked help to my friends
in studying club. They helped me through their brilliant ideas. So I could pass
the exam.
To sum up, if the students prepare for the exam with through making in a group member, they can debate and share their opinion and they can
improve their studies by helping each other. In this regard, I strongly believe that
students can improve their studies by learning with their classmates.
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- not only..but also 구문과 단/복수 그래머 사용이 잘못되어 있습니다. - study --> studies 로 정정하여 주세요. - 첫 번째 내용은 중간에 끊겨진 느낌이 듭니다.
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