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There might be some people who believe that the most important teacher's ability of a teacher should be just the skill for of teaching knowledge. However, I personally pesonally disagree with the above idea because I suppose that making good relationship with students is the most important ability for teachers.
To begin with, friendly teachers can stimulate their students to study harder. To be specific, a teachers' prime mission is to give students motivation that students to concentrate on their own study. Generally, Sstudents are apt to focus on learning learing, while when feeling their teacher's attention and care. Let me bring up my personal story as an example. When I was a freshman in high school, I had a good teacher who really tried try to communicate well with her students. Before I knew did not know the teacher, I was not interested intersted in study. Whereas However, I had changed from time to time since she taught me with care and attention. For this reason, Thanks to her, I became to study hard and entered a college that I had wanted to go. Therefore, in order to become a good teacher, it is more significant to build constructe a better relationship with students.
On top of that, students can learn about social skills by interacting with their teachers who relate well with their students. To explain expain, students need not just to grasp some knowledge, but to get a good way of interacting with others. Good relationship with teachers gives students a chance to know how to make wonderful social relations. According to a study done by World Research Institute of Education, people who have good relationship with others get 30 percent higher grades about satisfaction of life than those who don't. This is because happy life is not simply made up knowledge or understanding. This clearly shows that a good teacher who teaches a way how to enjoy life is the teacher who has have a the ability to help improving their students student's improve social socail skill.
To sum up, good fellowship fellowshinp between teachers and students makes students study harder and develop relationship skill. In this regard, I personally believe that a teacher's ability to relate well with students is more important than the ability to give knowledge.
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Independent Writing Rubrics Score 3.5/5 An essay at this level is marked by one or more of the following : - Addresses the topic and task using somewhat developed explanations, exemplifications and/or details (일정 수준의 설명과 예시를 활용하여 문제의 요구사항을 해결함) - Displays unity, progression and coherence, though connection of ideas may be occasionally obscured (문맥이 모호한 부분들이 있을 수 있으나 통일성, 연속성, 일관성이 어느 정도 드러남) - May demonstrate inconsistent facility in sentence formation and word choice that may result in lack of clarity and occasionally obscure meaning (문장의 구성 또는 어휘의 선택에서 내용의 명확성이 떨어지거나 의미 전달이 불분명한 부분들이 있음) - May display accurate but limited range of syntactic structures and vocabulary (답안의 내용은 주제에 부합하지만 제한된 문장구조나 어휘를 사용함) |