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Some
people think that young people should select a job which is in the different
field from their parents. They may think people can't cannot expand the sight, if they select the job in the same field with their parents. However in my opinion, it is beneficial for young
people to choose the same kind of job with their parent’s one. This is because
they can get some helps from their parents, also the traditions can be passed
on to the posterity.
To
begin with, parents can transmit their materials and knowledge from their
numerous experiences to their children who just started the job. It can be a
huge help to children because children don’t do not have many equipment and knowledge
about the job. For example, last year I watched one documentary program on TV. There
was one young woman who has started farming one year ago after her parents had retired
from the farming. She could hugely succeed because she cultivated a large tract which used
to be her parent’s. Also her parents have taught her a lot of methods to deal with
tough and unexpected circumstances such as drought and floods.
On
top of that, if young people take a job in the same field with their parent, many
traditions can be passed on to posterities. In Japan, Taking a same job with
their parents is regarded as great thing. Thus many young people go back to
hometown after their graduation and start their family’s own business such as Ryokan and traditional
foods. Eventually, a lot of traditional cultures still survived in Japan. In
contrast, most of young people go out their hometown and get a job in the big city
in Korea. As a result many traditional Korean cultures have already disappeared.
To
sum up, young people who are working in the same field with their parents can
get helps from their parents and they are actually protecting the traditional cultures.
For these reasons, I feel that working in the same field with their parents is beneficial
to the person who is in that field and It is even good for a society. Good: 24~30 점수: 25 약간의 문법적 그리고 철자적 오류들이 있었지만 전체적인 에세이 플로우를 방해하지는 않았습니다. 다만 아쉬운 점은 바디의 내용이 짧습니다. 좀 더 구체적인 설명을 넣었으면 더 좋았을 거 같습니다. 이것 이외에는 문제가 별로 없는 에세이 입니다. 수고많으셨습니다
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