▶ Your Answer : Two options are all important for development of country, but I personally believe that assistance for basic needs have to be the first priority than that for space expedition. There are two reasons. first, the time space explorations take is so long and second, the direct power of influence to people that support of basic needs is more extensive.
To begin with, It needs a lot of time for government to achieve the purpose of space research. Space is researched in many countries at present, and the research requires highly complicated technologies and big budget. So government cannot help investing in that study for long period. As an example, I will take a news I saw a few years ago. The govenment of Korea tried to lauch a satellite called Naroho in 2009 but they failed to shoot it up. In succesion, they tried twice again in 2012 , but I also didn't work. Although it successed in 2013, the study had more than 10 years periods of time from preparation to performing with one billion dollers. Of course that success was a big achievement, but It would be possible to save uncountable people during the same time by same budget. On top of that, aid for basic livelihood from government can help people more directly by their policy. People who cannot afford to make a living are not likely to interested in space industry because it is more imprtant for them to live from day to day. there is no guarantee that there will be merits for them if the universe study lead to big hit. Let me take my family's story as an instance. When I was born, my family was in poor economy. I was even hard to buy my baby powdered milk and diapers. Fortunately, in a little while, government started national basic livelihood security policy that provides 100 dollers per month for family with baby and free educations until middle school. Thanks to the policy, our family became stable and has lived with ease financially until now.
To sum up, In the aspect of time, It takes too much time to get the goal of space excursion, while aid for fundamental things can support people timely. Moreover, it is hard to say much more people who are in monetary crisis can be helped by expanding money for university research than basic things. In this regard, ensuring people's basic living have to come first than any other options.
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