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A stack of buildings have has (stack는 단수 주어 입니다) been
constructed and many convenience facilities have been built in a big city. Besides, it is hard to live without any convenience
facilities or other brand-new material that is available in a big city. There
are also chances to watch the public performances or
take higher education in a big city. As a person who enjoys these kinds of up-to-date technologies, I prefer to live in a big
city rather than a small town. for the following two subsequent reasons.
First of all, there are many convenience facilities
that are very useful for people living there there are lots of useful facilities in a big city. Since a lot of people have lived live
in a city, the facilities are undoubtedly needed
for them to live comfortably. Facilities such as
a hospital, library, and police station are essential for their secure living. That means I am able to could enjoy such a convenience
if I live in a big city. It is a prominent difference that a small town does
not have. Also, I could use technologies such as smart phone, 5G technologies,
and Artificial Intelligence whenever I want to search something in the
Internet, even wherever I stand.
Second, a big city has more cultural performances and
art shows to appreciate. People are likely to spend usually want to spend good quality of time on civilized activities
with their own friends and family. There are museums, performance stages, and exhibitions in a big city, but these hardly exist in a
small town. In addition, a big city has more popular university or higher
education institution. Students who desire more education are capable of learning what
they want by moving to a big city.
To sum up, I love to enjoy such technologies and social
activities, and these characters are usually only available in a big city. Consequently,
based on advantages I mentioned above, I prefer to live in a big city.
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