2. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people would say that parents are best teachers. Others people say that parents are not the best teacher. In this essay, I will describe that parents are not the best teachers because of several reasons with specific reasons and examples to support my opinion.
Firstly, parents are not the best teacher because of punishments. In korea among the proverb, parents have to punish stern methods to children, then your children will obey to parents. This is based on too many parents mind. So, some people would hit the children with too serious the scar, wound, and injury, which will remind their children too long time. Too many people would act in their children, sometimes the people would go in jail, that it deem to crime the juvenile crime. This case would happen too many. Therefore I think that parents are not the teachers.
Secondly, parents are not the best teacher because of conservatism. Korean parents are have the conservative mind, because of oriental confucianism influence. Korean have learned the confucianism for long time, which is too conservative knowledge, too old tendency. It do not match modern trend. For example, parents do not admit children mind, must to follow the parents mind. But, now this mind is not right sometimes. For example, parents do not admit the computer game, so ban the computer game, which become the business, earn much money, become the pro gamers job. If korean parents insist on conservative thinking, creative thinking will not exist, now in korea.
In conclusion, I describe that parents are not the best teacher because of above reason, which is punishment, generation gap with specific reasons and examples to support my opinion.
4.5 가 목표 입니다. 문장력이 정말 많이 부족 하다는 것을 많이 느낍니다. 30분 재서 쓴 것입니다. 3월말에 볼건데 평가 좀 해주 시면 감사 하겠습니다.
라이팅은 이제 학원도 안가고 평가 받을 데가 없습니다.
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