I disagree with
the idea that cars have made greater impact on
society than airplanes for the following reasons.
To begin with, the biggest impact of a
development of transportation on society can be measured by whether it enables
people or things move beyond nations effectively. Specifically, the development
of the transportations facilitate trades among countries, and enables countries to have
close relationships, so that they can solve common problems, such as
environment problems, together. To be effective, transportation should enable
people to move faster, and to go everywhere they want to go. In that sense,
cars does not impact as much as airplanes do. People are able to get to other
countries by driving cars, only when countries are located on a same continent.
For example, Donald Trump would not wouldn’t be able to take a trip to
Tokyo and Seoul to discuss about diplomatic issues, if he drove a car. Even if
there was a highway under the pPacific oOcean, driving a car would take much longer time to
get to other countries than taking a flight. Current diplomatic issues require
us to react more quickly. Eventually, driving a car will
not won’t able us to handle the issues well. In other words, cars
cannot enable people or things move faster beyond nations effectively. In this
regard, cars have not made greater impact on
society than airplanes.
On the other hand, airplanes do allow
people or things move across the nations effectively. Due to airplanes, people
or goods can move more effectively. Airplanes are way faster than cars.
According to the research held by Harvard university in 2011, average speed of
airplanes is 800 times faster than that of cars, allowing people to save their time. Furthermore, airplanes does not
have any restrictions to travel. ; By
taking a flight, people can take a trip across oceans. For example, by using
airplanes, not only countries can trade with other countries where they did not
have transactions earlier, but also trade much faster. As a result, countries
will have many economic benefits. For example, Samsung currently released a new
product, Galaxy8, and they want to sell the phone all over the world to maximize
their profits. Customers want to get their orders as fast as they can. Samsung
ships their products by airplanes, so they can meet their customers’ needs. Consequently, the company can make a lot of
profits, helping a country’s economy. In this regard, I believe that airplanes
have made greater impact on society than
airplanes.
To sum up, I believe that
cars have not haven’t made a greater
impact on society than airplanes for the following reasons: Ccars do not enable people or products move beyond the
nations effectively, while airplanes do. Consequently, the importance of my
opinion cannot be underestimated.
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