▶ Your Answer :Children should have art and music as
mandatory school subjects along with math, history, science, and language.
Some people think that it is preferable to
teach only math, history, science and language rather than to teach art and
music obligatorily. However in my opinion, art and music should be mandatory
school subjects. This is because a school is not a place in which where students study only for going to universities. Also art and music is are helpful to learn when learning other
subjects such as math, history, and science.
To begin with, most individuals would agree
with the notion that schools should provide art and music education for
students. This is mainly due to the fact that students who want to become
artists attend at school. (What are you going to say?) For example, while in a high school, my friend wanted to
be a musician. Other friend wanted to be artist. Without art and music
subjects, they could not have achieved their dreams. However, with art and
music classes, they could develop their talent, and they achieved their dream.
On top of that, students are able to learn other
subjects like math, history and science by learning art and music. This rings
true since studying art and music can develop their creativity, which is helpful
to study. (Which subjects?) A study, conducted by Korea University
of education, demonstrates demonstrated that students who learned math subject with art and
music achieved higher scores than others who learned only math subjects. Also, the former showed higher degree of creativity rather than the latter.
To sum up, it should be necessary for students to
study art and music. This is because schools have different students who have
different goals each other, and art and music subjects are able to help
students to learn other subjects. In this regard, I prefer to have art and
music as mandatory school subjects rather than to reject these subjects.
채점기준표 | Grammar | Contents | Example | Coherence | 점수 | 3 | 2
| 2 | 3 | Score | Fair 16-19 | - 첫 번째와 두 번째 논지가 다소 약한 편이에요. 첫 번째 내용의 경우 only a few 일 수도있는 미래의 artist/musicians 가 되고 싶은 학생들을 위하여 모든 학생들에게 음악과 미술교육을 강제로 한다는 점에서 반박이 들어올 수도 있고, 두 번째 역시 creativity가 어떻게 다른 과목에 도움이 되는지 구체적으로 언급해주셔야 합니다.
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