A large number of people might argue that it is okay to trust their first impressions about others’ characteristic since it is a general way to judge others. In contrast to popular belief, I think that it is highly risky to judge people based on their first impression for the following two subsequent reasons.
First of all, judgments relied on first impression can be rude. Not only can it lead one to gain biased view but also ruin relationships. For example, a new math teacher came when I was a middle school student. She was wearing a long black dress and sharp triangular shaped glasses. Her accent was very strong and her voice was always loud which made students, including me, think that she was angry all the time. I used to think that she was the scariest teacher in our school. Yet, after few months, we all realized that she was, in fact, a friendly person. Whenever I asked her difficult math problems, she tried her best to explain in the easiest way possible. From then, I began to feel close to her, visiting her office every week With her kind characteristic, I started to feel close to her, visiting her office every week. This indicates that first impressions are often wrong and can even lead to negative consequences.
In addition, trusting first impressions can prohibit one to gain broader perspective. Especially in today’s globalized world, it is important to have acceptance towards diversity and I believe people can do this by taking time judging on person’s character. For instance, according to the ministry of Education of Korea in 2011, there was a huge difference between two groups of students in achievement. Students in group A were asked to write down their first thought about a girl shown in the picture, while students in group B were required to do the same and later see her talking video. The study found out that the latter group were better in accepting others’ opinion than the former group. This shows that judging based on first look provides a narrow view.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that people should take time judging people rather than trusting their first impressions for the reasons I mentioned above. All in all, the importance of not judging a person’s character quickly should not be underestimated in order to improve the quality of life. (384 words)
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