▶ Your Answer : There might be some people who believe that making friends who are like themselves has several benefits. However, I personally disagree with the above idea for the following two subsequent reasons.
To begin with, people can have opportunities to learn from various sources. To be specific, since people have a variety of environment and experience people each other can have more chance to get information or thought that themselves can not come up with. A survey was conducted by Korea University in 2000 with 1,000 citizens as respondents. The purpose of it was to understand the consensus view about whether diverse friends could have positive impacts on people. The majority had responded that people who had different kinds of friends were likely to succeed than those who had friends that resembled themselves. The overwhelming of 75% had claimed that the former was more likely to get amounts information for success. Since they could have resources that can help themselves succeed more easily, they also are able to achieve their goals more readily. This poll shows that various people can provide much information that can help their friends.
On top of that, people can promote sociability from their various friends. In fact, if people had friends who were similar to themselves, they would not help limiting their thinking range. On the contrary, people who have friends that have various surroundings can have chance to understand the difference based upon realizing the diffrence between them. For example, I will talk about my experience to ilustrate this point. When I was in middle school, I had limited range of friends that I could make. Since the school was in countryside, I could not help making friends who went to that school, which made me think the school was whole world and the human relationship is all that I made with those a few friends. However, when I became a high school students, I had chance to know the diversity. I had opportunities to know amounts of friends who have diffrent thoughts from mine. Admitting the diveristy made me more considerate and discreet about dealing with relationships. Through this experience, I realized that recognizing the diffrerence from others can help people think open-minded.
To sum up, diverse friends can give people various resources that can help them, and make them sociable. In this regard, I firmly believe that having friends who are different has several positive impacts on people.
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