▶ Your Answer :These days in Korea, teachers in school are not allowed to reveal their opinion about specific political issues. This is beacause many people agree with the idea that students should not be exposed to teachers's opinion on social and political issues in class. Also, I strongly agree with this statement. First, teacher's statement can block students to make their own opinion. Second, teacher's specific statement can make students blame other student's opinion. First of all, teacher's statement on political issues can block students to make their own opinion. Since teacher is an influential person to students that teach only right things in general, students will tend to follow teacher's opinon. For example, when I was 15 years old, my middle school teacher told me that she thinks eating dog meat is not a bad thing. I usually respected my teacher because she was always smart and kind to everyone. So, with no suspicion, I thought it was an absolutely right statement. And I grew up with agreeing with that statement. However, now I think eating dog meat is really bad thing becasue they are also our family. Like this, just because it was my teacher's opinion, I thought she was right with no critical thinking. Second, teacher's specific statement can make students blame other student's opinion. If the leader of the class who is teacher makes an opinion, most of students will tend to follow that opinion, and other students who think it is an wrong opinion will get teased from other students. For example, my friend susan who attended in political class had an debate about utilizing CCTV in several places. Before the debate began, teacher claimed that she disagree about utilizing CCTV in everywhere. Students started to agree on her statement. When my friend claimed that she thinks CCTV is beneficial for decreasing crimes, other students blamed her that it is wrong argument and said that she has a weird opinion. This situation occureed because teacher made students agree on specific opinion and made one's other opinion as wrong thing. In conclusion, I strongly believe that students should not be exposed to teacher's opinion on social and political issues in class. It is clear that teachers are people who should encourage students to make several opinions and experience the critical thinking project without making them biased on specific opinion.
단어를 쓸 때 teachers in school이렇게는 안 써주셔도 됩니다. 너무 당연한 내용이기에 의미가 없는 듯 합니다. 문장은 이해가 가게 작성하셨으나 문장 자체의 큰 의미는 전달되지 않습니다. 필요없는 extra문장이 굉장히 많은 편이며 예시가 생각보다 너무 길게 차지한느 것 같습니다. 다음부터늠 brief하지만 main point는 전부 들어갈 수 있도록 간결하고 확실하게 작성하도록 해주세요. 또 spelling오류 굉장합니다. proof reading통해 고쳐주세요 |