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It is generally agreed that society benefits from the work of Its members. Compare the contributions of artists to society with the contributions of scientists to society. which type of specific do think valued by your society? Give specific reasons to support your answer.
Modern people generally agreed that society benefits from the work if its members, who are artists and scientists. In this essay, I will compare the both, choose the one choice, which type of contribution is valued more by our society, and specific reasons to support my opinion.
Firstly, There are several advantages about the contributions of artists. First thing, they would give the stability of emotion, which is music, paintings, sculptures, and so on. Second things, they would support interesting plays, which give to us, about fun, grieve, fantastic scenes.
Secondly, there are some advantages about the contributions of scientists. First thing, they would make much better enviroments, such as the field vehicle, medicine, architecture, and so on. Second things, they would make all the field more convenient.
Thirdly, I would think that contributions of scientists is more value than those of artists, because it improves our essential life, more than the past. Most people have experienced some illness, such as, injury, cancer, and serious illness, but through researching problem by making scientists, it is more better things than the past centuries, easy finds everything. In my case, 5 years ago, My mother diagnosed cancer by medical machine, which is the newest tool in the field. If it is not invented by them, I will lose her, abruptly situation. It is possible to have strong health in the life, and easy to expect the body conditions. Thus I assert that the contributions of scientists is more value than those of artists for our society.
In conclusion, I compared the both aspects, choosed that contributions of scientists is more valued than those of artists, because of improving of the our essential life.
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