In the future, students may have the choice of studying at home by using technology such as computers or television or of studying at traditional schools. |
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With the passing of time, innovation of technology has brought about development of methods of studying. However, it is a question that which method is more effective and convenient. Given the choice between studying at home by using advanced appliance and studying at library with a large number of books, I would choose studying at home by utilizing current tools. The reason is that studying at home enables students to spend time efficiently and to communicate with a number of assistants.
More than anything else, it is evident that by using advanced technology students are able to administrate their studying time effectively. This is because (that삭제) the advantages of using appliance for studying far outweigh the disadvantages of doing so. For instance, my older brother (had삭제) had to deal with substantial tasks for graduation last week, so that he purchased outdated laptop, which is product of prestigious company, to figure out such overwhelming tasks. Then, he finished a lot of his tasks only in one day which are the same quantity of work as he had to do for three days. Judging from my experience, by using computer, the effectiveness of studying would be increased to the peak.
To sum what I mentioned above, using up-to date aplicances allows students to study better. The reason of this is that by using latest technology students can spend time effectively and communicate with other helpful people freely. Therefore, if certain students have to choose whether studying at home by using technology, they should select studying at home rather than studying at traditional schools. |