Games can teach us valuable lessons about life (첨삭 부탁드립니다. 몇점이나 받을수 있을까요.. 라이팅 점수가 잘 안올라서 고민중입니다. ㅠ.ㅠ) |
Those who consider side-effects of games, such as addiction and a waste of time, would argue that games are useless tools for a human life. However, in my opinion, I firmly beleive that we can learn precious lessons about life through games. The reasoning behind this is that games provide us with techniques of abiding rules and cooperating with others.
To begin with, we can learn to keep rules in order to be successful in real life. When we play games, we face with various game rules and try not to distract from them so as not to receive any penalties. Therefor we transmit(apply) this lesson to our actual lives and get benefits from it. To illustrate, I used to play games called 'burumarble' which deals with how to buy houses all around the world. Although I first felt confused to understand the game rules and had a hard time to keep those rules, I came to realize the importance of keeping rules and how the world real estate market is being handled. This personal experience clearly shows that game teaches us to follow rules in life. - Good point, examples are well-stated... but a few misuse of words are found.
Next, games teach us to be cooperative. As the games sometimes require several people to work together in the same team, teammates should try hard helping each other if they want to win the game. For instance, recent study conducted by sports research center revealed that cooperation was one of the main benefits people get from playing sports such as soccer or baseball. This is also the same in playing cards in groups because you have to support (your) team mates to win the game. This shows that we are able to learn the skills to be cooperative while palying games.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that games provied us important lessons in life since they lead us to follow rules and cooperate with others. Hence, (All in all)I think playing games should be recommended among people.
Well done for this essay.. I could readily find out your main ideas about this topic. A few mistakes do not seem to affect your grade but your usage of words are to be improved in order to obtain your desired score. Generally, good. I guess your score for this essay would be between 4.0 and 5.0. I am not sure... ^^ Keep it up ^^ |