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As mass media has been developed, people are exposed to a plenty of information and media contents. Especially, the accessibility to media contents is higher to young people than to older because they are more familiar with the use of smartphone or mobile devices. Many adults and experts typically worry about the negative effect on teenagers because young people tend to depend on what they watch in the television or smartphone. However, I think teenagers have ability to select proper information. This being so, mass media’s leverage has more advantages than disadvantages.
First of all, young people easily get a lot of information through the television or movies. Accordingly, their perspective can be wider. In particular, recent teenagers are knowledgeable about politics.Since major news channels announce up-to-date political situations and analyze each candidates' policy and political stories, even high school students can judge which candidate is proper as a leader and which policy is useful and effective for the community. The fact that some experts claims that teenagers are enough mature enough to vote is one of the evidence. Also, the results of major student politic debates can prove their ability to understand political issues.
On the top of that, a variety of media contents make teenagers be interested in various fields. Unlike parents' worry that they are only interested in games or entertainment, television gives young people an opportunity to engage in social issues. Based on my personal experience, when I was middle school student, I watched one of the famous environmental documentary TV programs. After watching, I realized the importance of natural environment and I had to do something for the necessity of preserving it. As a result, I voluntarily organized the campaign to reduce the waste and to save the energy in my middle school. I also tried to encourage other students to participate the campaign. I think it is the best example to show the positive effect of mass media in reality.
In conclusion, it is true that media contents'clout (무슨 말인지 모르겠네요) is strong to young people. However, As long as they choose the useful information and utilize it with good purpose, there is no problem that they are earlier exposed by mass media.
예상점수: 21~26 총평: 글에 자잘한 문법적인 실수가 많아요. more familiar 같은 중복적인 표현은 more을 사용하시면 안됩니다. 또한 글을 길게 쓰시기 보다는 정확한 단어를 찾아서 짧고 직접적으로 쓰시는게 훨씬 글의 내용을 이해하기 쉽게 해줍니다. 글의 예시도 첫번째랑 두번째랑 모두 적절합니다. 다만 문법적인 실수들 때문에 전달력이 조금 떨어지는 것 같아요. 수고 많으셨습니다. |