▶ Your Answer :There is a plethora of opinions regarding should the riches donate more regarding with the argument in which rich should donate more. I believe that affluent people should make more donations than ordinary people. I
feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following
essay.
First of all, only a small portion of their
property can be a great amount of donation. Let’s say, someone who earns $2000
a month decided to donate 5% of his money to an orphanage, he would be donating
one hundred dollars a month. However if an owner of a business who earns $100,000
donates 1% of his salary, it is a thousand dollars he would be donating.
Smaller portion of rich people’s money is much more than larger portion of
average people’s money. Moreover, a
hundred dollar donation could be a financial burden to that person, however it
would not be as much for the rich who donates $1000 for his one hundred dollar salary.
Secondly, donating can help build up
positive image of the company or the business. If a company donates money and
their products to charity on regular basis, people will grow fond of that company
and buy more of the company’s products. Then the company will donate more off
of that increased to increase revenue, forming a virtuous circle. One of the largest food
product company in Korea, Ottogi is a compelling example. About a month ago, there
was a news about the company’s donations to many charities and organizations
which were done secretly. After the news came out, the sales has increased significantly.
In consequence, I believe that people with
more money should donate more because donating little portion of their money
will not affect their assets much and because it will help them make more money. Good:24~30 점수: 24 일단 전체적인 분위기를 보았을 때 너무 양이 짧다라는 느낌이 들었습니다. 양이 짧다라는 느낌은 구체적인 설명이 부족해 보인다는 느낌이듭니다. 각 바디의 예시나 이러한 모습을 보면 그냥 예시에 대한 설명만 있을 뿐이지 왜 기부가 중요하고 부자들이 꼭 해야하는 지에 대한 설명이 많이 부족합니다. 설명이 부족하기 때문에 개연성이 부족해보인다라는 느낌을 받을 수 있고요. 따라서 좀 더 구체적인 설명에 중점을 두면서 에세이를 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다. |