▶ Your Answer :
The writer argues that there are several
reasons why the medical industry in USA has problem. On the other hand, the
lecturer cast doubt on the writer’s argument because there are some solutions.
First of all, in the lecture, it is
unlikely that doctor shortage caused by strict regulation is serious. It can be
solved by expanding resident system. Also nationwide funding is another
solution. This counter the author’s assertion that medical license is too hard
to get and fund raising is not an effective way to keep up with the demand.
Second, according to the lecture, it is
doubtful that the number of doctor is too small to care patient properly. The
lecturer said that increasing the foreign doctor can be a solution. In
addition, lecturer argues that the government should aid them to make them
qualified in USA. This counter the writer’s claim that insurance made it
possible to go to hospital to without expansive charge and it made it hard to
keep up with the increasing demand.
Finally, the lecturer said it is
insufficient evidence that doctors are dissatisfied with their job. It can be
solved by decreasing the number of patient per doctor and eliminating the
pressure, doctor have been experienced. This contradicts the reading passage
that it doctors are forced to work hard and there are no ways to relieve the
stress of these doctors.
점수: 27 지적할 부분이 없는 통합형 에세이입니다. 통합형 에세이에서 가장 중요한 부분을 차지하는 것 중에 하나는 한 주제에 대하여서 서로 다른 정보를 가지고 있는 리딩과 리스닝에 어떻게 비교하고 반박을 하는 것인지를 보는지를 잘 설명하는 것이 중요합니다. 지금 이 에세이 같은 경우는 리딩이나 리스닝 둘 다 서로 구체적으로 자신의 정보들을 잘 보여주는 거 같습니다. 잘 서술하였습니다. 수고많으셨습니다.
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