▶ Your Answer : Undoubtedly, friends play a significant role in people's daily lives in many of the places where they work or play. Some people think that having a friend with a good sense of humor is better than having an intelligent friend while others do not. Both may have their own reasons to support their views. If I were asked to choose one, I would say that having an intelligent friend is better. There are several reasons as follows.
To begin with, when one has intelligent friends, he can have better academic results in school. Smart people normally are good at studying academic subjects and they can teach their friends how to approach difficult problems and spend time together studying. When such help is well used, it is likely to bring better results in tests. For example, Tokyo University found a huge difference between two groups of high school students in SAT results. One group consisted of those who had smart friends whose IQs were higher than 100, while the other group was made up of those who had friends whose sense of humor were good. The researchers found that the former was likely to have higher scores in their SAT scores. To be specific, the SAT scores of the first group were higher than the average of the States by fifteen percent, showing better understanding in all subjects. On the other hand, the academic performance of the second group was just in average. This implies that having a friend who is able to give help academically is the key to success for students. If one had a friend who was only humorous rather than being smart, it would not be helpful for his tests.
In addition, having an intelligent friend can broaden one's horizon. Intelligent people know about various fields academically as well as practically because they understand and digest many kinds of subjects easily. People around the intelligent people are able to acknowledge that different values exist and arose their interests in a new subject. For example, when my sister was in university, she often felt depressed, thinking that her life became an exhausting routine. To survive in a competitive world, she spent the whole day studying academic subjects, hoping that she could outdo others. Fortunately, she could let some steam off after she hung around with friends from an Intelligent Student Club in her university. The friends shared some knowledge such as a history of Indonesia, a life of Buddha, and a new trend of classical musics. In this way, my sister could convert her attention from studying to other worlds and ultimately overcome the depression. Without the intelligent friends, she would not have been able to escape her boring life.
To sum up, importance of having intelligent friends because it can help people to achieve their goals and to broaden their own worlds. In this regards, I strongly believe that making smart friends takes precedence over hanging around with fun friends.
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