It is debatable whether governments have to impose fees to drivers who use roads during rush hour. It is intriguing question because opinions concerning this issue can be different relying depending on each people's perspectives. However, as far as I concerned, I think that 'governments should impose fees for using roads during rush hour.' for following reasons.
First of all, governments should make drivers pay for using roads during rush hour because it can make economic benefits governments can make more economic benefits. To be specific, there are many people who use their cars during rush hour. So if governments make them pay for it, it can be huge source of economic growth. According to the 'Jungang newspaper', which is renowned newspaper in Korea, Korean governments could raise huge money from fees for using roads and tunnel during the rush time. This research reveals that fees during rush hour make economic bemefits.
In addition, governments have to make drivers pay for using roads during rush hour because it can make people's daily life efficient. such policy can make people's life convenient To be specific, Fees would make people avoid drive during rush hour. This means that faster travel and shorten time of drive for people who have to drive during rush hour. Therefor, people can get extra time instead of struggling on the busy road. For example, after Seoul imposed fees on the road which my dad use for commute, his time for commute decrease more than 2 hours. Thanks for it he could slept more and even did exercise every morning. This example clearly shows that fees during rush hour can make people's daily life more efficient.
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