▶ Your Answer :
It is expectable
that a cyber school having courses online will replace the extant school system
in the future. In general, some people insist that taking courses online will
make our life more comfortable. In my opinion, However, I strongly believe that
a cyber school cannot modify current system for the following two subsequent
reasons.
To begin
with, the school has served as teaching how to make a good relationship for
people regardless of fundamental knowledge such as math, history and physics. it
is one of the most essential factors to bond with others in this society and
immutable truism will never be change. If students do not go to school and
learning everything at home, they will lose the opportunities to make friends. There
was a poll conducted by Korean Education Association to assess whether
homeschooling is effective. Though students without school curriculum satisfied
enough themselves, their academic performance was measured extremely lower
compare to people studying in school. Through this case, we can check a role of
school that student expand their ability, competing and cooperating with
others.
In addition,
it is difficult for student to solve their question in time if they do not contact
with teacher in person. Even though online seems convenient to use and save a
lot of time, it will rather be a waste of time and uncomfortable. For example,
when I was in college, I took an English class online and there was Q&A
service for student, which can solve the problem that helps students
communicate with teacher. However, the service did not work well due to delay
to get an answer. Since the teacher could not check the questions all day long
with personal life, student had to wait for one day at least, checking answer continuously,
and it disturbed to grasp the solution because of time gap. I used to forget
what I was confused from and waste time a lot. Therefore, effective education
involves taking class in person.
Taking all
these reasons into account, since a cyber courses will disrupt education system
goes on well, the extant schools will keep their position to improve student’s
academic performance and save time more.
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