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Some people might think that being able to work with other people is not critical than it was before. However, I personally disagree with the above idea for the two subsequent reasons. First, people working with strangers increased currently. Second, thanks to developed technology, it is more convenience and safe to work alone.
To begin with, there are a lot of opportunities to work with strangers because recent tasks do not require a face-to-face work. Therefore, people get to be possible to work in only web based condition. Since they do not know about each other specifically, there are always some risks. For example, when I did teamwork at the university last month, the professor allocated team members randomly. The members did not meet, but communicated only on the web mail. Then, a member of our team abruptly disappeared. Since I had no information about him, there were no ways to solve the problem. If we had met before, or did our work on off-line like the past, he might get more responsibility and did not vanished.(예시가 주장과 어떻게 이어지는지에 대해 이해가 안갑니다. 약간의 핀트가 어긋난 듯한 느낌이 들었습니다. 또, first reason으로는 stranger과 일 할 기회가 늘어났다에 대해 설명하는 거 아닌가요??)
On top of that, working alone is more convenient and people do not have to accept risks than working with other people. Over the past few decades, internet technologies have developed and people get to more utilize it. Thus, a person able to work diverse things such as directing, promoting and even advertising through the web sites. There is a survey conducted by 64D institution showing quietly apparent results. The researchers investigated a level of working satisfaction and compared two groups. One group who working alone is 68% higher than the other group, and they explain that there is no distraction or opinion conflict from other people, so they could more satisfy with the work when they work alone. In conclusion, lack of other’s distraction make people do much better. To sum up, working with other has many risks. Moreover, modern technologies enable people to work alone and rise their satisfaction. In these regards, I firmly agree with that being able to work with other people is more critical than it was before.
주장을 잘 이해하지 못 한 거 같습니다. 본인의 주장은 이전보다 지금 다른 사람들과 함께 일하는게 훨씬 중요해졌다 아닌가요? 근데 첫번째도 그렇고 두번째 paragraph에서도 계속 이의 반대를 설명하는 것 같습니다. 기술이 발전하여 사람들이 이제는 서로를 보고 일하지 않아도 된다고 작성하셨는데 이건 본인 주장에 반대하는 예시인건 같습니다. 내용이 굉장히 mixed up되어서 이의 point자체를 이해 하기 힘듭니다.
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