■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic :People are less happy and satisfied today than people were in the past.
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▶ Your Answer : Most people in modern societies believe that they are likely to be felt themselves that they are not happy, comparing to those who lived in the past. Those who think that way insist that the reason why they are not pleased with their lives is because of losing neighbors and friendship. It could be seen as plausible, however I do not agree with the hypothesis. I believe that people in this modern world are enough to be happy for the following two reasons: first, people are able to enjoy their lives via various media developed recently, and second, people are always likely to find happiness and joy within their lives. This essay will discuss these ideas.
To begin with, when we look around of people near us, we are able to realize that people enjoy their lives by themselves with many media. For instance, using smart phones, tablet PCs, and labtops which became lighter in weigh to be carried efficiently have made our modern civilians enjoy many entertainments. They watch drama, news, or a variety of TV show via the apparatuses in their break time. It is too enjoyable that even recent studies worry about addiction to those media. It clearly reflects that people enjoy in their lives at least individually, which means that they are able to figure happiness out within their days.
Secondly, every single person is eager to be happy, so they find the way on their own. The eagerness to be pleasant of a person is based on nature, and it is inevitable for human. For example, people usually say that those in the poor countries are happier than those in civilized countries, but this theory is flawed. People always find their ways to happiness. For example, my best friend of mine faced a breakup with his girlfriend recently, and he was in the deep mourness for a while. He, however, soon rose up from saturation of the emotion by playing computer games. It was his own way to get rid of unhappiness. Thus, it is people's nature to find happiness within their lives, which means they are living happy lives. (에세이에 써져있듯이 그것은 그의 방법입니다. general하게 가셔야 합니다. computer games의 발전으로 오늘날 사람들은 과거의 사람들보다 행복하다~ 라는 식도 하나의 방법이 될 수 있겠습니다. 이 문단은 off topic입니다.)
To sum up, I strongly assert that people in present days are living happy lives, because they have a lot of devices to enjoy, and they all have nature to be happy, which means every single person in various country is able to be happy. (문장이 너무 길고 늘어집니다. 여러 번 쪼개주세요.)
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1. 각 문단 시작 전에 tab 버튼 눌러서 들여쓰기 해주세요.
2. 철자 오류가 잦은 편입니다. 심한 감점의 요인이 될 수 있으니, 에세이 작성을 마치시고 꼼꼼히 검토해주세요.
+) 단어를 외우실 때 스펠링을 집중적으로 외워주세요.
3. 주제는 사람들의 행복감을 과거와 비교하는 것입니다.
따라서 비교급이 와줘야 합니다. feel more happy, less happy 등
단순히 사람들은 오늘날 행복하다 가 아니라는 점을 숙지해주세요.
4. 사족을 줄여주세요.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*