Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? |
Currently, since there is a "well-being" trend in Korea, people's standard of products that they buy are being based on natural ingredients. These people believe that the closer to countryside, the healthier and happier they become. Therefore, they might say that it is better for them to live in small towns which are mostly located in rural areas. However, because there are many useful facilities , it is easy to find good academies and there are many places to have fun near my home, in big cities, I prefer living in big cities.
To begin with, there are many useful facilities in big cities such as public libraries, cafeterias, and parks. They are open for any citizen that comes to those places. Because they are mostly funded by the government, they are free to use and they are very helpful for people. For example, I had used the library which is right in front of my house, called "SNL", for a week to prepare for my final examination. I could not study well because there were too much car noise in my home, however because the library was so quiet due to its well built soundproof facilities(materials), I could concentrate on studying algebra. Because of the library that I could use for a week to be ready for my test at school, I could get an A on the final test.
In addition, it is very easy to find good academies in well developed regions such as big cities because there are many of them competing each other. Eventhough academies are places where teachers teach students, the major reason why they are built is in order to make a profit. To make a profit, they have to make better plans to teach students effectively, also they have to provide students with good sevices. Hence, it is a piece of a cake to find an academy that is proper to learn certain subject. To illustrate, last year, when I was in the second grade of Korean National University, I was trying to learn about the national history of Korea(Korean history) since it was one of the subjects. To find a teacher, I went out of my home and headed for the street where there were many academies. There, just with five minute looking around, I found one that was very famous for teaching the national history of Korea(Korean history). The intense competition between institutes made me easy to find one.
Lastly, there are many places to enjoy my free time not faraway. People living in cities have much stress due to the tremendous amount of work they have to finish in a day. Because of that, people need to relieve their stress and therefore, there are many sites they can relax and have fun. For instance, because of the final test of this summer term during the last week, I was very tired. Thus, I and my friends hang out together and went to a famous department store near our places. We could easily find a clothes mall there, and we bought several clothes that looked very fancy and cool. During the time, we were very satisfied by the fact that we could easily enjoy our free time without trying to go somewhere faraway.
Small cities are certainly good places to live because they have their own merits. However, since in big cities, I can use many free facilities, find suitable academies with ease, and I can spend my free time near my place, it is definitely a better choice for me to live in big cities than to live in small, rural cities which do not have these advantages. |
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