0143 Some people believe that students should be given one long vacation each year. Others believe that students should have several short vacations throughout the year. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice. |
Under the education system in Korea, there exists two quite long vacations in Summer and Winter respectively. Each and every student including myself always desires the advent of vacations. It seems beneficial for students especially Korean students to have long vacations for the removal of tremendous amount of stress accumulated during school times. However, I am in favor of an australian education system, which contains four frequent and short holidays. Rationales behind my thesis are that a relatively short period of resting time is more effective in refreshing our lives for schools and that long vacations like Korean system could on the contrary confer more tiresome to students. To begin with, short but frequent vacations are considered effective ways to educate students in most western countries. Most people in school find school boring and even abhor the school life. For this reason, government must contemplate some efficient ways to make students enjoy the school life rather than feel weary of it. I, as an example, hate to attend school in every single day because I am compelled to be stuck in a classroom with over 40 classmates. However, when had a privilege to attend one of Australian private schools, I greatly enjoyed the school life since there were 4 short and long vacations occur between each term (between 1 month ~ 2 month) Hence, I believe in order to make the school life enjoyable and happy, short but frequent vacations must be considered as a solution. Furthermore, long vacation system causes students to become so lazy that they are apt to spend valuable time aimlessly during the long vacations. In other words, if vacations are too long, these usually give school attendees too much relaxing feelings to utilize time without thorough consideration. For example, as soon as students are on a vacation, they tend to think that there is a sufficient time for them to study after playing. However, it is always the case that they spend too much time on playing to do their studies later on. Accordingly, I, who suppose a vacation should be educational and meaningful just like being at schools, believe that long vacations often make students neglect their duties. In conclusion, several short vacations are highly beneficial compared to long vacations with two main reasons: one is short vacations are more effective for students to refresh their minds and these can enable students to plan their time not to spend their life aimlessly. I believe several short vacations must also be a part of Korean education for the improvement of Korean education in terms of quality. |
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