It is better to spend money on a thing that will last long such as jewels than on a short-term pleasure such as vacations. Do you agree or disagree. |
Some people say that spending money for a short-lasting pleasure is the best way. They insist that spending money for short-term is more intense and memorable. However, I agree that spending money on a thing that will last long is better than others for two reasons. First, spending money for a long-term delight is more rewarding for our life. Second, spending money on a thing that will last long is all the more economic. A life is too long for a transient pleasure but it is too short for a long-lasting delight. This fact causes people to take varying viewpoints; folks on one side claim that it is the best to enjoy instant moment on the ground that the life is too short for an enduring delight. On the other hand, others contradict their claims by saying that the meaning of life can be degenerated into a total waste by preferring short-lived values. - rationale -~~~~~생각이 안나군요.. Most importantly, spending money for a long-term has a significant effect on having a fruitful life. Of course, short-term experiences such as traveling and eating out offer us a great fun. However, it is so momentary (temporary) that we always get back to the ordinary life style. Indeed, things which we truly need are more lasting. Let me take uncle of mine for example. When he was in college, he thought that lives which can be self-indulgent is the most successful life. As far as he is concerned, playing sports and traveling is the most important things(activities) to him than studying hard. Naturally, he did his best to enjoy life. After undertaking club leaders of traveling, playing sports, and pop music band, his academic achievements and economical point of view was much too bad. Ultimately, he never got a job. So his life was broken down. If he had had an opportunity to learn knowledge (do not match 유학이 지식?)such as studying abroad, job skills for his future, he could have a better life. In this sense, spending money for a long-term delight is more rewarding for our life. Next, spending money on a thing for a long time has made a great contribution to our economic conditions. Obviously, short-term spending may be more beneficial to us. However, it tends to pursuit just short-term interests or entertainment in general. For sure, spending money on a thing that will last long is expected to engender greater benefits. More than anything else, using money for longtime life has values in exchange. What it means is that we will be prepared about urgent crisis. For example, when one friend father’s company faced failure, her mother exchange jewel such as diamond, platinum, and gold for money. As time flies, (제꺼 인것같음 time flies) this money caused this firm’ revival. This showed that spending money for a long-term life will save us from this crisis. In addition, using money for longtime future is usually consumption at long interval. As a result, it can make additive benefits such as bank interest. These are why it is better for our economic conditions to spend money on a thing for long life. To sum up, I agree that it is better to spend money for lasting things for the reasons that I had mentioned above. First, spending money for a long-term has a significant effect on having a fruitful life. Second, spending money on a thing for long life has made a great contribution to our economic conditions. - conclusion may be your weakest point. Put an end to it and this essay is well organized and composed of good vocabulary.... but not very convincing... I think.. don't worry about my personal stupid viewpoint. well done anyway |