It is better to watch serious movies that are designed to make you think than to watch movies that are primarily designed to amuse or entertain. Do you agree or disagree? (너무 쉬운문장만 쓴게 아닌지..문법적으로 체크해주시는분 감사하겠습니다 (_ _)) |
Most people enjoy watching entertaining movies to relieve stress and laugh in their spare time. Some people say that watching serious movies give us instructive lessons, which influences on reminding of social problems. In opposition to this point, I strongly agree with the idea that it is better to watch movies that are designed to entertain than seriously boring movies. There are two reasons supporting my point of view.
~seriously boring movies~ 진지한 영화라고 표현을 하고 싶으신 것 같은데요, 여기서 seriously 는 부사로 쓰이며 해석하면 "심각하게 지루한 영화들" 로 해석 될 듯 해요.
More than anything else, people need to take a break in order to relieve stress. People frequently get stressed and depressed by hard working. They need to vitalize their lives through outdoor activities such as watching entertaining movies. For example, one of my friends who was into watching movies took me to the movie theater to show interesting movies. He recommended me to watch this movie even though I refused to go there because of being tired. While watching the movies, it made me laugh and forgot stress of my work. After watching the movie, I satisfied with the movie and it gave me great pleasure.
~hard working~ 보다는 ~working hard~ 가 옳은 표현입니다. ~it made me laugh and forgot stress ~ 여기서 laugh 전에 to부정사가 생략되어 있다는 말은 아시겠죠? 그렇다면 to laugh and forgot 은 맞는 문장이 될 수 없습니다. to부정사 후에는 항상 동사 원형이 나와야 합니다 ^ㅡ^ ~I satisfied~ ->~I was satisfied~
In addition, by interesting films, we can get along with other people and spend a great time with them. We have to pay some money for watching movies with spending time. We don't have to get stressed and feel bored in spite of charging expensive money by watching serious movies such as documentaries. Amusing movies give us a memorable day and provide entertainments. For instance, when I was in high school, I occasionally went to a movie theater with my classmates. Before going there, we didn't know each other well except one thing that we were in same class. After watching the movie, I talked with him about that for a long time. We had in common with liking funny movies, which motivated us more close. Finally, he became my close friend and remained so.
~by interesting films~ -> ~by watching interesting films(or entertaining films 제 생각엔 이게 더 맞는 표현인듯 합니다만.)
~which motivated us more close~ -> ~...us to be more close~ 아시리라 믿습니다. close 해 지게 우리를 motivate 한 것이죠.
~he became my close friend ~ -> ~he became one of my close friends~ 가 더욱 완전한 문장이 되겠습니다.
In summary, people should realize that watching funny movies have lots of advantages in many aspects. we can make a friend by watching movies together and it will be a unforgettable time. Above all, entertaining movies give us a loud laugh to be able to forget our stress.
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