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Teachers have a high sense of responsibility. They should transfer
knowledge at the in textbooks to the
students, and also should relate well with students them to guide them to the right path. Both
transferring knowledge and relating well are important jobs of teachers. However, in my opinion, teacher's
ability to relate well with students is more important than the ability to
transfer knowledge because knowledge can be acquired easily nowadays, and
teachers should be a model for the students.
First, knowledge is something that can be acquired
easily by anyone nowadays. If there is something you do not know, you can
access to the internet through computers or smart phones and get the
answer very quickly. Therefore, the importance of the teacher's teaching
ability is getting less important every year. In addition, as more and more
students carry smart phones in school, students nowadays look through their
smart phones when they have something they’re
curious about instead of asking teachers. In
short, the development of information searching techniques diminished the role
of teachers' as a person people who
transfers knowledge.
Second, a teacher should be a role model for the students. Not only you
learn knowledge is acquired at the
school, but also you also learn lots of
social skills such as morality, and
ethics. Those are something things that
cannot be easily learned from textbooks, but should be transferred to students
naturally through experiences. Especially, experiences related to a
teachers play an important role when cultivating
students' moral values. To illustrate an example, I still cannot forget the
teacher of mine when I was at high school, who loved students a lot and had
kept motivating students who were stressed out by study, and I learned how
important it is to comfort friends who are in a bad
mood. It is clear that having a good
relationship with students is essential to achieve such goals.
In conclusion, I argue that teachers having a
good relationship with students is more important than delivering knowledge
since students have an access to wide range of information and knowledge, and
also because students consider teachers as a role models.
Even if the school is not the only place where
you can learn new information, still it is the only place where students can
learn valuable social skills and morality, and it is the
teachers' role to confirm lead students
to pick up the right mind and spirit before they
graduate.
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