▶ Your Answer :
In the reading
passage, there is ample support for the author’s claim that increasing tax on
tobacco has several advantages. However, the professor in the lecture gives several
reasons as a rebuttal to the author’s point.
First, the professor
contends that increased tax will not be deterrent to young smokers. The study
says that if the price of cigarette is raised, the young will start purchasing
from black market dealer. Also, the number of smuggling will get higher and
they will sell products in cheaper cost without checking ID. This casts doubt
on the reading passage’s claim that it will make fewer young people start
smoking due to the less money to afford it.
Next, the
professor argues that raised tax will not be the benefactor of the environment.
It will not provide the government with sufficient fund to solve the problem. Decreased
revenue will be gathered because fewer people will buy cigarette. This counters
the reading passages assertion that the tax will repair damaged environment by
combating the problems.
Finally, the
professor insists that raising tax will not alleviate the poverty. If the price
of cigarette is escalated, people will purchase it less likely, which affects
whole profit of the company. Subsequently, many people engaged in agriculture,
manufacturing, and retail will lose their job and the situation will get worse.
This refutes the reading passage’s suggestion that revenue raised by higher tax
will be used to lessen the poverty by providing financial assistance.
점수: 22 리딩에 대한 정보가 많이 부족한 통합형 에세이입니다. 통합형 에세이에서 가장 중요한 부분을 차지하는 것은 한 주제에 대하여서 서로 다른 정보를 가지고 있는 리딩과 리스닝이 어떻게 비교하고 반박을 하는지를 보는 것 입니다. 지금 이 에세이 같은 경우에 있어서는 리딩에 대한 부분을 한 문장으로만 서술하였는데. 한 문장으로 끝내는 것 보다는 리스닝을 좀 더 반박할 수 있는 부분들을 더 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다.
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