▶ Your Answer :
Some people believe that choose a major which
needs to study more time and to get better opportunity job offers. There are
obviously many opinions regarding this topic, but I think I would recommend my
friend to choose a major which needs to less study for a degree and start
working full-time soon. The concepts of health and motivation provides the
validity of the opinion.
First of all, being a student for a long
time is not that good for students’ health. To study longer for better job chance,
it is essential to get financial assistance from their parents and then
students will get high pressure of it. In addition, it would become more
serious if students found out that their major is not fit in well with them,
the situation would be worsened. This situation will stress students. In fact,
stress is one of the primary factor of illnesses since it weakens the ability
of the immune system in the fight against disease. For instance, my uncle, a
doctor at a general hospital in a city, tells me that many patients who were
studying for a long time in a university came to him due to stress-related
ailment such as headaches, and insomnia. After closer examination, he found out
that the close relationship between stress-related symptoms and students’ low
self-esteem and high stress induced by long-period study is the main factor
that engendered the stress related diseases. It may be hard to believe, as he
said, even some of his patients got better after quit their study. In this
sense, it is healthful for my friends not to study longer for the better job opportunity.
In addition, choosing a major which needs
to less study and allows students to start working soon can increase friends’
motivation in life. This is because, unlike studying longer, short-period study
for a degree is easier for students to consider as a tangible goal. Usually,
only two to four years are required for it. And after the period, students can
earn their own money soon so that this can be a big facilitator to improve
themselves. My friend, Suji is the best example of it. She thought about
medical school for her university once, but she gave it up and entered nursing
school instead. When she started to study in the college, she found out nursing
study is very harder than she expected. However, she did not give up her study
and could finish her study with good grades at the end. The reason why she
could that it was short term of study which needs three years. As she said, she
could have not continued her study even if she had to study for five or six
years like studying in medical school.
In conclusion, all things above considered,
it is better I recommend my friend to choose a major that allows my friends to
get a degree faster and start working full-time soon. The example of health and
motivation support the argument.
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