▶ Your Answer :
Some people might
believe that universities should invest money on
hiring good teachers. However, I personally disagree with the above idea for
two reasons. First, making good facility can improve the academic performance of students. Second, it also
increases the quality of the lecture.
First, making good facility leads to the improvement
of students’ performance. Students' performance
is affected by many factors, such as their health and stress. By investing on
facility, the university can make students become less stressed and more
healthy healthier, so they can focus on
their study, and it leads lead to the improvement of their performance. Let me bring up
my cousin's story as an example. My cousin was good at studying and engaged enrolled
in a very famous university. Also, the university he went to was
well known for a very heavy load of study. Whenever
he finished his work at school, he seemed to be so exhausted. One day, I asked
him for the reason why he could continue his study even if it was so hard. He
replied that although it was so exacting exhausting, he could concentrate on his study because
of the university's good facility. If the
university had not had good facility, he could have ended up quitting his study.
On top of that, investing on facility enhances the quality of the
lectures. The primary role of the university and
its professors is giving knowledge to students. However, if equipment, such as acoustics and projectors, is
are poor, even though a good teacher will
have a hard time on conveying their
his knowledge. Thus, making good facility should
be prioritized for teaching students. According to a survey
done by Korea Education Department, 80% of professors replied that improving
facility is the most important factor for a good
university. This is due to the fact that the quality of facility is crucial to
teaching students. This clearly shows that investing on facility can improve
lectures’ quality.
In conclusion, improving facility can improve students performance, and
the quality of the lecture. In this regard, universities
should invest money on making good facility.
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