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The
lecturer argues that sucralose does not have perilous affect effect (affect는 동사 입니다) on the health of
human. This casts doubt on the reading passages claim that it should be avoided
due to negative impact on the health.
First,
the lecturer suggests that insulin generated by sucralose has nothing to do
with diabetes. The primary reasons for diabetes are from obesity and it is
usually the result of ingesting rice, potatoes, and soda which do not get paid
much attention by people. This counter counters (this는 단수 주어 입니다) the reading passages point that
sucralose consumers have a higher possibility to get diabetes as sucralose
activates 20 percent increases in secreting insulin.
Next,
the lecturer argues that it is not true that sucralose produce produces (sucralose는단수 주어 입니다) harmful
substances when it is cooked. Laboratory tests in the past are not associated
with materials that people utilize in real life with higher temperature. This
refutes the reading passage’s suggestion that it makes detrimental matters
during cookery by combination with other matters, which is highly related to
cancer.
Finally,
the lecturer contends that there are not any verification on allergic reaction
from sucralose. None of dependable date has been proved and many trials could
not indicate that sucralose is more interconnected to the symptoms. This contradicts
the reading passage’s assertion that sucralose initiate initiates allergic responses with
a number of cases that people suffering it after use up sucralose contained
meals.
점수: 26 일단 단수 복수 주어에 따른 동사 형태를 항상 파악하면서 에세이를 서술하시길 바랍니다. 통합형 에세이에서 가장 중요한 부분을 차지하는 것은 한 주제에 대하여서 서로 다른 정보를 가지고 있는 리딩과 리스닝이 어떻게 비교하고 반박을 하는 것인지를 보는 것 입니다. 지금 이 에세이 같은 경우는 리딩이나 리스닝 둘 다 서로 구체적으로 잘 설명하고 있습니다. 수고많으셨습니다.
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