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Some
people think that to have having a science course is better than not attend to the
science lecture. This is because, nowadays Nowadays (this is because는 독립형 에세이에서는 적절치 않습니다) science development offered the
society and it is easy to utilize technology in our life. However, I think
university should not plan to require students to have a course in science.
There are two reasons for support my opinion. for the following two subsequent reasons. First
and foremost, it can be harder to study for students who have literally
different major. In university, it cannot compare with high school study, it is
much more difficult as it is more difficult. Also, it is hard to get higher grade if do not understand
the whole lecture people do not understand the lecture. Moreover, some students who have two major like some
languages and trade department feel difficult to get scholarship. This is because to have Having two departments might
hard to spare their time only in study. be hard to concentrate on their study For instance, if there are students who
are not related in science is unfair to them. To study language with science
and there are not any opinion to make students to choose. They might give up
one department they should do because of university’s requirement. However,
students who are in science major must be easier than those students. In this
angle, university should not offer students to have science major in
obligatory. It is necessary to find out students that cannot have the science
class.
On
top of that, science is not easy to be a necessary course for students.
Moreover, to take basic science course also require students to attend and
experience about science. However, there must have some students who does not
have any basic science or forget all of the science that learned in high
school do not have the basic knowledge. This can be the worst day when they were in school to study science. Because
of hard work in science, Students could stop to learn in university. For
instance, there are students who learn their major give up because of difficult
study that they did not did before. Except offered to students to have basic
science, there are plenty of students feel hard. This is because students feel
that there are many theories which are complicated and have difficulty to
understand. Moreover, there are some students had it not been for the students
to study with tutor, they would have trouble to follow the lecture they listen.
In this angle, students have hard to study their own major class and it is
worse for students who are not related with science.
To
sum up, university should not make student to listen basic science in
obligatory. Moreover, they should recognize how hard to students to have classes
that are not related to science.
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