▶ Your Answer :
The lecturer argues that there was a large
civilized community in amazon because some reasons why the opposite side’s
evidence are not correct. This contradicts reading passage’s claim that some
facts are proved to their argument.
First, the lecturer contends that jungle
didn’t prevent people to build the city. Because dense vegetation was spread
over the Amazon and it is evidence of possibility of settle. Ancient people
could help each other with this vegetation. Also roads and canals were founded,
which are powerful evidence proves to existence of civilization. This cast
doubt on the reading passage’s claim that rain forest disturbed them to make a
big community and infrastructure.
Next, the lecturer claims that artifacts
was found, which was sophisticated enough to think there was an artist. For
specific, ceramic vessels and bowls were founded in mocroh island and poetry
was founded in other region. This counters the reading passage’s claim the
things founded were too simple to make a hypothesis that there was an elaborate
community.
Finally, the lecturer asserts that the
European couldn’t find the civilized tribes for a reason that the region is too
large. It makes sense that they just find jungles and small tribes. For
instance, Combodia, was concluded to had civilized community at mid nineteenth
century by explorers because the investigation was really hard to research all
the parts. Thus refutes the reading passage’s claim that there was no evidence
founded by some Europeans, so it is reasonable to think there was no
civilization.
점수: 22 통합형 에세이에서 가장 중요한 부분을 차지하는 것은 한 주제에 대하여서 서로 다른 정보를 가지고 있는 리딩과 리스닝이 어떻게 비교하고 반박을 하는 것인지를 보는 것 입니다. 지금 이 에세이 같은 경우에 있어서는 리딩에 대한 부분이 많이 부족합니다. 리스닝에 대한 부분은 군더더기 없이 모든 정보를 다 서술하였지만 리딩에 대한 부분은 한 문장으로만 서술하였습니다. 한 문장으로 리딩에 대한 부분을 끝내는 것 보다는 리스닝을 좀 더 반박할 수 있는 부분들을 더 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다.
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