■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : The most important thing the government should do to improve the quality of life is to protect the environment. |
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▶ Your Answer : The environment is all around the humanity and it affects (주어 동사 불일치) human life significantly. With this understanding, I believe that the most important thing the government should do to improve the quality of life is to protect the environment for two reasons. This is because the environment is closely related with public health and food supply. First, protecting the environment enables people to be stay healthy. Understanding the public health and the effect of polluted air and water is necessary to substantiate this view. Air and water are the most essential factors for people to keep their lives. However, if air and water are polluted by harmful chemicals, then these chemicals would come inside of body and ruin organs and immune system. This results in a number of disease like lung cancer and a lower quality of life. For example, one of the biggest air pollutants is particulate matter which is known for a result of desertification. These fine dust has blown through the sky of factories emitting harmful substances to the atmosphere. The polluted dust has reached an residence area. As a consequence, the mortality of the area has raised twice as non-polluted. On top of that, the effort of sustaining (동명사) the environment can ensure the food security. In response to the increasing role of government in improving the quality of life for their people, many expert opinions and research statistics reinforce the idea that environmental protection enables government to secure food supply. For example, a clean environment provides a place to live for animals and plants. Essentially, environmental destruction means loosing sources of food. Securing the food supply is the basic component of improving quality of life. To be specific, Pollock is one of the favorite fish in Korea, however, the number of fish was decreasing due to pollution in the ocean. The government tried to reduce the pollution by regulating dumping trash in the ocean. As a result, the number of fish came back to normal state and people can have the fish on their dinner table again. To sum up, I believe that the government should protect the environment to improve a quality of life for the following reasons; to protect public health and to maintain enough food supply. Consequently, the importance of my view cannot be underestimated for the reasons I have mentioned above. |
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