▶ Your Answer : Some people might think that teachers should not be allowed to talk about their social or political perspective in the classroom. However, I believe that teachers should make their social or political views to students for the following two reasons.
First of all, students can improve their communication skills. Understanding the environment of the classroom and the potential role of the teachers' political view is necessary to substantiate this view (어떤 부분에 있어서 이러한 주장을 입증할 수 있는지를 좀 더 구체적으로 서술하시길 바랍니다) . If teachers gives give (teachers는 복수 주어 입니다) their opinions about political issues, some students agree with their ideas and the others might disagree with the ideas. Students can also give their own ideas about the issues. In a discussion, in order to persuade other students, students should be able to gives can give (to뒤에는 동사 원형 입니다) their opinions with support for the opinions. From this process, students can learn how to listen others saying and organize their ideas. Consequently, teachers opinions about political and social issues can improve students' communication skills
On top of that, teachers can promote students' interest in political and social issues. In response to the importance of students' interest in political and social issues, many expert opinions and research statistics reinforce the idea that teachers can enhance students' interest in those issues. Experts say that students usually are not interested in political issues, because they spend most of their time studying academic subjects. As a way to increase their interests, teachers give students opinions about those issues in the class. This can be guidelines to participate in society. Students can learn about what is going on in society and how their teachers think, and eventually they will be able to develop their opinions on specific issues.
To sum up, I believe that that teachers should make their social or political views to students for the two reasons: to improve communication skills and promote interests in issues. Consequently, the importance of my view cannot be underestimated for the reasons I mentioned above.
점수: 22 일단 지금 이 에세이는 전체적으로 단수 복수 주어에 따른 동사 형태에 대한 오류들이 있습니다. 항상 에세이를 서술할 때에 이러한 부분들을 집중하면서 에세이를 서술하시길 바랍니다. 또한 지금 이 에세이에서 나타나는 가장 큰 오류는 이유에 대한 입증할 수 있는 부분들이 구체적으로 서술되어있지 않습니다. 좀 더 구체적으로 서술하여서 대략적으로 무엇을 말하려고 하는 것인지를 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다. |