▶ Your Answer :It is debatable whether which of the following has the greatest impact on my choes when i cosider a major purchase. This is an intruguing questions because the opinion can be differnt relying on the individual perspectives. In my opinion, however, i believe support (support라는 단어를 사용할거면 뭘 support할건지 목적어 분명해야합니다) that finding information from magazines is the most major choices. First, there are many disadvantages when i recommendation from friends. To be specific, reocommendation from friends can lead to occur many wrong choices. Because, even best friends have different perspectives, mind and living situation. So me and friend can feel different when we have to make a choice for major purchase. Even it can make much harder for making choice. For example, from my personal experience i should choice the country for studying English. I spend very hard time because it was very important for me and for my life. I was considered United States and Austrailia. The condition of both countries were very similiar. My friend recommend me to go Unites States. She explained me that i can learn native English at there. So i trust her and studied at United States. However, after arriving there i was very regret of my choice.(앞 문장과 뒷 문장의 시제가 맞지 않아 내용 전체 뜻을 망가트립니다) The education situdation was much worse than consituition of Austrailia. And even i should cost twice of money for mere subsistance. As a result, like these there are many disadvantages of recommendation from friends. In addition, i can not believe the reviews from online communities. Becasue i've been many companies hire the people and make them to write good evaluation. Also, there are so many fake advertisement on the internet and SNS. However, information from magazines are always right. They always always 다음엔 원형동사입니다 published right and confirmed information. Becasue many people watch magazines and it can affect to (동사 affect 뒤에는 to 안들어갑니다. effect와 affect 차이 구별해서 작성해주세요) the society. Also there are various type of evaluations from experts. For example, the time when i was studied in the university. I should buy a preasent for professor. But i have no idea about buying preasent for professor. So i found every magazines for professor. Eventually, i can make right decision. Through this experience, magazines is having major impact on decision. To sum up, magazines have lots of correct and specific information. So it will help people when they have to consider major purchase.
우선 spelling오류가 너무 많아 해석할 수 없는 문장들이 꽤 되는 편입니다. proof reading한번만해도 다 고쳐지는 건데 주의해서 작성해주세요 또, 대문자 소문자 구분이나 문장부호등 아주 조그마한 문장오류들이 계속해서 보이는 편입니다. 주장이 깔끔하게 전달되지 않고, 이에 대한 supporting detail도 전혀 자세하지 않습니다. 그냥 수박겉핥기식으로 아주 기본적인 것만 언급하고 지나갑니다. 에세이보다는 문장쓰기 연습이 먼저 필요해보입니다. |