▶ Your Answer :Some people think that all students do
not have to learn basic economic in high school. However, in my opinion, it is
better to get a knowledge of basic economics than taking only major subjects.
There are two reasons. Students can be more competitive and gain a knowledge.
To begin with, people will become more
competitive if they have the knowledge of basic economics. To survive in this
endless competition, people ought to be interested in various academic fields.
In the case of college admission, everyone is aware that entering college is
like a camel passing through the eye of needle nowadays. One's ability can be
clouded by other's abilities so in order to stand out, a person must take
interest in many academic fields.
For example, when I had an college
interview to go art management major in United States of America, I got a
question about economics from one of the professors. He was a business school
professor and he wanted to know that I have requirements for admission. (약간 뜻이 애매모호 합니다. rewrite하는게 나을 것 같습니다)Fortunately, I learned basic economics in high school, So I could answer well than
other students.
.
On top of that, through studying
economics, students can gain useful knowledge that can help them in the future. For
example, there was a poll conducted by Seoul National University, with 300
university students as respondents. The purpose of the survey was to understand
the consensus view about taking economic class in today's high school. An
overwhelming 85% responded that high school student have to learn basic
economics. This was mainly because, most of university require students to take
cultural studies and economics is the hardest subject.(문장 구조가 잘못 연결된 것 같습니다 rewrite필요) Therefore, learning
economics in advance in helpful for students who want to go college.
To sum up, high school students can be
more competitive and gain useful knowledge by studying basic economics. In this
regard, I firmly believed that high school students should learn basic
economics for the reasons I mentioned above.
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