▶ Your Answer : There are common 2 tactics for finishing his or her tasks. First one is gradually working on it a little bit but each day. The other one is working on my assignments intensively and finishing it in a short time. There are two reasons why I prefer the latter. (인트로에 적합하지 않는 독립형 에세이입니다. 훅도 없고 어느 부분이 자신의 주장인지 도 모르겠습니다. 인트로를 다시 숙지하셔야 할 거 같습니다)
First of all It can make me efficient (여기서 말하는 it에 대상이 무엇인가요?). When people are under circumstances that they have to do something in very short time, they get so efficient to meet the deadline. For example, As I’m a medical student now as I am a medical student (대문자는 문장 시작할 때만 서술하시길 바랍니다), my school doesn’t does not (독립형 에세이에서는 줄인말을 서술하면 안됩니다) give me enough time to study and understand it well. I always had to study hard to get decent grades in limited time. Though It’s too harsh and tough, I was able to cram whole range of knowledge which I took in lectures in my head. After the test, I can complement something I missed or didn’t understand well.
Second reason is that I can spend my time on something I’m interested in saved by working on intensively. Furthermore, one can save time in working effectively Everybody has its own hobbies or interests but we all need to make our time on purpose to enjoy them. In my experience, I was a very efficient student so I managed to save time by studying medicine for school test in short time. During saved time, I used to study other stuff especially physics and computer science. I really am sure that those variable knowledge will be used as basic tools for researching treatment for severe diseases.
Taken together, Working working (대문자는 문장 시작할 때만 서술하시길 바랍니다) on a huge assignment intensively is much better because it makes me more efficient and I can do my own stuff after I finish my assignments. In this regard, I prefer to finish my assignments intensively.
점수: 22 일단 이 에세이를 읽으면서 느낀 것은 전체적으로 표현면에 있어서 어색한 부분들이 많고 설명들이 모호하다 생각합니다. 지금 이 에세이에서 제일 많이 부족한 것은 설명이 많이 부족합니다. 설명이 모호하고 부족하다 보니 무엇을 말하려고 하는 것인지 알기가 어렵습니다. 따라서 지금 이 에세이에서 필요한 것은 좀 더 구체적으로 자신의 주장을 전달하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다.
template 같은거 없이 걍 제가 아는 데로만(수준 낮은 어휘로만) 썼습니다. 이런 식으로 쓰면 몇 점 정도 나오겠습니까?
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