짧게 할께여.배고파서 밥먹으로 갈까 하거든여.. -.-:;
#106 : You need to travel from your home to a place 40 miles (64 kilometers) away. Compare the different kinds of transportation you could use. Tell which method of travel you would choose. Give specific reasons for your choice.
One drastic?? progress recent centuries have seen would be transportation#. Indeed, the invention of modern engines has changed our daily life significantly, comparing with the time when animals were the only way of transportation. Not only can people travel (beyond the earth) to the universe by space shuttles, (they can easily )go across oceans by airplanes or ships.## In this era of abundant transpotation, when I needed to take a 40-mile trip, I would be able to choose several different kinds of transportation, such as cars, motorcycles, and trains. Among them I (would probably)will choose my car for the trip.
# It ~that 강조구문이 어떨른지.. Concievably,it is the progress of transportation that have been developed dramatically until comparatively lately.
##는 순서바꾸는게 어때여? 20세기 초반의 비행기기술의 발달에 힘입어 대륙횡단과 대양횡단이 감행되었고 50년대 후반에는 급기야 우주시대를 열게 되었다.(에고..배고파서 문장쓸힘 없어유 지송..)-옛날>근간으로..
서론의 문장엔 probably,matbe같은 말은 가급적 지양해 주세요.님 문장의 힘을 떨어뜨릴수도 있슴다.
Unlike public transportation, I can decide my schedule at my convenience. If I (had) have to use public transportations such as routine buses or trains, I would have to know their schedule first and adjust my itinerary accordingly. (Although I would be lucky enough)Fortunately, if I could find an adequate schedule, I would also need another luck hoping it is actually running on schedule on the day of my trip.#
#문장 이상합니다. 뜻이 이해는 가는데.. 다시써보시기 바랍니다. I must check the schedule whether or not it is correspondent with my itinerary??
Motorcycles do not sound bad.# In fact, they sound cool.# However I believe a motorcycle is one of the most dangerous vehicles ever invented and I would not want to trade my safety to the 15-minute nice look. One more factor that makes motorcycles more unattractive is that,(in my country), they are not allowed on highways in my country.
#It is not very unpleasant for me to hear mesmerizing roar of the motocycle. cool은 속어임다.가급적 아카데미컬 라팅 쓰는데는 지양해주시기바랍니다.
#걍한국말 적어놓신듯.. 다시써보시길바랍니다.
With these convenience factors in mind, I would drive my car for a 40-mile trip. Its convenience and minimal??minor? safety would overweigh (the possible upsides??) of other means of transportation.
minimal,upside는 사전찾아서 확인하시기바랍니다. 용법이 잘못쓰인듯 하네요.뉘앙스가 틀립니다.
총평: 무자게 잘쓰시네요..인트로가 주제에 비함 좀 거창한 느낌이 있고요.(머 그렇지만 크게 문제될것 같지는 않네요..관심을 일으키기엔 충분한듯) 한국말을 걍 영어로 바꾼듯한 느낌의 문장이 곳곳에 눈에 띄는군요. 잘쓴 글을 읽고 배껴보시는 노력이 절실하게 필요할때인듯 합니다. 이상 허접코멘트였슴다.행복한 하루!! (아! 배고프다. 밥먹으러 가야지!! 꼼꼼하게 못봐드려지송하네여) from 지나가다..