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Reading passage and lecture have a different opinion about the all white - killer whale that spotted in 2000 and 2010. Reading passage claims that two whales are different, but lecturere argue that those are same one. They talk about the three different point, like skin color, location that spotted the whale and the size of the dorsal fin.
Pointing out the fact that whale observed in 2000 was all white color but the other one was greyish white colored, reading passage says that those two are different whale. But lecturer tells that different color can be caused by the different algae composition on the water. Since water color can be changed by algae and water works like color filter on the eye, even if those two whales have same skin color, skin can be recognized in different color when it seem through the different firter.
Also passage says that since orca prefer staying in small group to travelling long distance, based on the fact that in 2010 whales are spotted in 1500miles away from the location of the 2000, it has low possibility that those two are same whale. However professor contend that there are different types of whale, hunting type and fishing type. In the case of fishing type, it usually travels for 2000 miles, so 1500 miles is not that far distance for iceberg, if it was fishing type.
Professor also explains that dorsal fin of the whales that age over 20 do not grow any more, which makes hard to guess age by the size of a fin. It's mean that even two whales have same size of fin does not possibly indicates tha those two are in the same age. So, the argument that age of the two whales are not that different is not logical.
관사와 오타 수정 Reading passage and lecture have a different opinion about the all-white - killer whale that spotted in 2000 and 2010. Reading passage claims that two whales are different, but the lecturer argues that those are the same one. Pointing out the fact that whale observed in 2000 was all white but the other one was greyish white colored, reading passage says that those two are the different whale. But the lecturer tells that different color can be caused by the different algae composition on the water. Since the color of the water can be changed by algae and water works like a color filter on the eye, even if those two whales have same skin color, skin can be recognized in the different color when it seems through the different filter.
Also, the passage says that since orca prefers staying in a small group to traveling a long distance, based on the fact that in 2010 whales are spotted in 1500miles away from the location of 2000, it has low possibility that those two are the same whale. However, the professor contends that there are different types of whale-like hunting type and fishing type. In the case of fishing type, it usually travels for 2000 miles, so 1500 miles is not that far distance for the iceberg if it was a fishing type.
Professor also explains that dorsal fin of the whales that age over 20 do not grow anymore, which makes hard to guess age by the size of a fin. It's mean that even two whales have the same size of fin does not possibly indicates that those two are of the same age. So, the argument that the age of the two whales is not that different is not logical.
Fair: 17~23 점수: 23 리딩에 대한 정보가 부족할 뿐만 아니라 구조적으로도 문제가 있는 에세이인 거 같습니다. 각 단락을 시작하는 부분에서 문제가 보입니다. 또한 통합형 에세이에서는 한 주제에 대한 서로 다른 정보를 가진 리딩과 리스닝이 얼마나 적절하게 서로 반박하고 비교하는 것을 보는 것인데 지금 이 에세이 같은 경우는 리스닝에 대한 정보는 충분하게 들어가있지만 리딩에 대한 정보가 많이 부족합니다. 한 문장으로 리딩에 대한 정보를 끝내는 것 보다는 리스닝을 좀 더 반박 할 수 있는 부분을 더 서술하는 것 이 좋을 거 같습니다. 수고많으셨습니다.
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